the beginning part of my fan fiction (draft)
Hi, all
This is only the beginning part of my fanfiction, which is about KungFu Panda. As I'm not sure what is going on next , it hasn't got a title. Please, please give me some suggestions so that I can make it more interesting.
“Po! Can you concentrate a little while?!” Shifu shouted.
“You need to think what I’ve taught you before practice! No dinner today! Go to the cliff till I allow you come down!” Shifu said angrily and walked away.
“Oh, poor me!” Po mumbled and climbed up to the cliff. It was dark and cold, Po felt hungry, and he began to looking for some wield fruits to feed him.
“Nothing fun here! Aha, berries! En, yummy! Let me find some funny things! Maybe… maybe I can climb that tree!” Po talked to himself happily and began to climb the tree. He threw Shifu’s scolding far away and played enjoyably.
It’s getting darker.
“Po! Po! Where are you?” A worried voice came to Po’s ear, it’s Tai lung, Po’s brother, Shifu’s oldest student of seven.
“Brother! I’m on the top of the fern tree! Come to play with me!”
“Po! When can you grow up? Come down now!” Tai lung was powerless when facing his beloved little brother.
“O K !I’m coming!”
“Tai lung, what do you bring for me?” Po knew that his brother must bring some food for him just like every time he was punished by Shifu.
“Ah, noodles and bun! Oh, my favorite! I love you brother!” Po swallowed his slaver.
“Po, eat slowly! Don’t hurt yourself!” Tai lung said gently. He loved this brother so much; they’ve been living together since they were adapted by Shifu.
Tai Lung was the oldest also the best students of Shifu, so he was pointed as dragon warrior by tortoise Master Oogway. He was abandoned when he was a cub, Shifu raised him up and taught him KungFu. Tai Lung was grateful to Shifu and Master Oogway, he respected them and treated them as his parents. As for his five little brothers and sisters, Tigress, Monkey, Mantis, Viper, and Crane, he always took care of them, especially the naughtiest one Po. As the dragon warrior, Tai Lung also was responsible for protecting the whole village safe.
It was a sunny day, in the morning it just as usual as any sunny day, birds were singing on the trees, villagers were working…
As every day’s work, Tai Lung and other six were patrolling around the village carefully. He felt there was something unusual. He lied down and tried to listen to the sound from the ground. He heard a huge hurricane-liked sound was approaching.
He suddenly realized that the biggest danger is coming. Master Oogway and Shifu told him there was a black dragon lived in the West Haven who attacked the village many years ago and was defeated by Master Oogway and Shifu. Since then, he practice martial arts crazily and try to revenge one day.
Tai Lung immediately called others by a whistle and told them the severe situation. He allotted Tigress to report to the Master Oogway and Shifu, Viper and Monkey to tell the villagers to hide in the forest, the rest which are Mantis, Crane, Po and himself secured the only way of access the village.
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4 comments:
hey grace...you have started out well...Good Job!!hehehe...this fiction is interesting and funny too..po is always eating.hehehe...I think u have added a new character rite??po's bro??i think creating new characters is aslo interesting..Im looking forward to seeing more of ur fanfic..i think its gonna be really cute and interesing.its good to apply alot of humor in this fanfic....all the best=)...
Hi, Grace~ I think it's a really good start~ Po is so cute! ^^* and i think you're describing well for the scence of that the danger is coming! Getting excited to see more of your work~ Good luck- ^^
Hey Grace! Kung Fu Panda is one sassy talking animal movie I haven't seen, but if it's too much to give a brief summary I guess I can go to Wiki. What you might be able to help me with is suggesting where your fanfnic departs from the original (sorry to have to impose this burden on you). Very brief synopsis - one para - is fine. ^_^
This movie seems immediately interesting to me from the start inasmuch as most big productions of this kind have centred on very western characters, plots and settings. Must be a register of China's growing cultural presence that this one is set there (right?). Or does it represent Hollywood using China as just another 'exotic' location, like Africa in The Lion King?
Anyway, you've set up a good plot device (the hurricane): will this move the characters from the ordinary to extraordinary world in classic popular genres style?? The Filmic Narratives 1&2 PP slides can help with this, if the ideas stop flowing.
Hi, Paul
Film Kungfu Panda tells the story of believe. Po is a panda who worked in the family noodle restaurant; although he was over weight and clumsiness he had a dream that is to become a great master in the discipline. In order to defeat the previous student evil snow leopard warrior Tailung, and to protect the valley, tortoise Master Oogway held a ceremony to choose a dragon warrior who should be a supreme master of kung fu that can defeat Tai Lung. Unexpectedly, not the favorite five students of Shifu( Tigress, Monkey, Mantis, Viper, Crane), Master Oogway insisted to point Po as the dragon warrior ignoring Shifu’s against. Before past away, Master Oogway persuaded Shifu to believe that Po is the best choice for dragon warrior. Meanwhile, Po began to accept arduous training and finally became a dragon warrior defeated Tailung. In my fan fiction about Kungfu Panda, Tailung is the kindest brother of Po, the best students of Master Oogway and Shifu and the dragon warrior, who always looks after others and died in a fight with the evil Black dragon. Po is the naughtiest student and always lazy on practicing. Tailung’s death makes him become studious and responsible and at last he becomes a new dragon warrior.
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